[Report This]Date: Apr 29, 2017 11:55 pm Title: Chapter 7
I'm with Vic. Why is there a giant pink dildo in the garage? Justin's got it in his head that there are camera's. You know I say he's right.
Date: Apr 29, 2017 11:07 am Title: Chapter 6
Michael, I'd say call the police, but then you'd go to jail on drug charges. I guess you should nurse your wounds and come up with another plan ala Pink and the Brain.
Lindsay, next time just a bag of oranges, lol
Awww, loved the intimacy.
Date: Apr 29, 2017 11:07 am Title: Chapter 6
Michael, I'd say call the police, npbut then you'd go to jail on drug charges. I guess you should nurse your wounds and come up with another plan ala Pink and the Brain.
Lindsay, next time just a bag of oranges, lol
Awww, loved the intimacy.
Date: Apr 29, 2017 11:03 am Title: Chapter 5
Progress!! Yes! I like the idea of Brian playing in the water. Just stay away from sharks. Oh no, Mikey is going to get caught, this GHB issue won't quit.
Date: Apr 29, 2017 9:29 am Title: Chapter 6
What an amazing chapter: funny (the dildo battle), emotional (Brian and Justin, slowly going towards each other) and soothing (the way these "strangers" come together in this special place).
I can't wait for Gran to come back and meet Emmett: that's a promise for fireworks.
Date: Apr 28, 2017 7:15 pm Title: Chapter 6
Once again you delight us with your humour. Must admit, nearly peed myself reading about Lindsey chasing Michael around and smacking him with the dildo. LMFAO! Man alive she's pissed! And righfully so.
that scene betseen B&J.......omg...My heart was breaking for Brian. So broken over what his supposed friend did to him. An absolute betrayal. He just seemed to know that justin would give him sanctuary. It was truly a lovely scene you wrote.
Looking forward to more of course.
Cheers,
Elaine
Date: Apr 28, 2017 5:36 pm Title: Chapter 5
The teasing!!! It's amazing what words can do.
Gran is hilarious: "I was hoping it was the tail Justin’s been waving this at"
Gus is so funny and direct, just like his father and Mel.
A few of great repartees:
“Not everything I wanted to blow got out of my head.” Brian tells him, looking at me.
“I love him, but he doesn’t growl.” I tell him, thinking about the person who does.
“I’ll growl any way you want.” Comes from behind me. I turn as Brian jogs by behind us with Gus and Tobey.
Date: Apr 28, 2017 3:34 am Title: Chapter 6
Wow. Remind me not to piss off Lindz.
[Report This]Date: Apr 28, 2017 12:57 am Title: Chapter 6
The guy next door is going to be closer then Justin thinks. Go Lindsay.
Date: Apr 28, 2017 12:43 am Title: Chapter 6
Omg god lol she beat him with a cock..... I normally do not like Lindsey nor Michael but go go Lindsey. I hope Brian will make Justine happy. Thank you for another chapter.
Date: Apr 28, 2017 12:13 am Title: Chapter 6
OMG!!!! I nearly choked on my Pepsi laughing at the cock-whipping Lindsay gave Michael!!! LMFAOOOOOooooooo!!!! It will probably be the first time and only time the Twerp will keep his mouth shut. LOL Thank you Melanie for breaking code and telling Lindsay before the Florida trip!
As for Brian and Justin, I love the fact that trust is building between them. The fact that Brian was honest in his feelings towards Justin, who is so free with his own, was hot and endearing. This is definitely shaping up to be much more than a summer fling for both of them.
Happy Writing and HUGS,
~Nichelle
[Report This]Date: Apr 27, 2017 11:55 pm Title: Chapter 6
ROFLMAO!!!! I love that Lindsey went WASP on his ass and beat him with a dildo. He'll get laughed off Liberty Ave if he admits he got beat with a dildo.
Oh what a visual you wrote up!
Date: Apr 27, 2017 3:54 pm Title: Chapter 5
Some pretty hot interplay between our 2 favorite boys. Wonder how long either will last with their own convictions? Will either give in or stand firm a bit longer. I'm actually enjoying Justin's almost "hard to get" attitude. He doesn't want a summer fling and says so. Brian's typical in adn out won't work here at all. He must realize that. He wouldn't put this much effort into it if he was only interested in a one time thing.
Emmett going to Vic was interesting. I must say I had teh same reaction as Emmett at one point. vic's initial comment made my jaw drop! Even slightly trying to excuse Michael's behaviour is just wrong. I guess because it's family, and it's well known what Michael's feelings are towards Brian, that vic is just trying to find a way to not have Michael be as evil as he's actually been. Really curious as to what Deb's reaction is going to be. Will she disbelieve what she's heard and back Michael, or will she kick his ass. I mean it's not fact, but let's face it...it's pretty much a given that he did it.
Cheers
Elaine
[Report This]Date: Apr 26, 2017 11:25 pm Title: Chapter 5
Love the characters in this story. Growly and Justin will hopefully get together soon. When Emmett and Ted get there things should get interesting. Gus has already charmed Gran. I take it Lindsay doesn't know what Michael did? She's pretty much the only one who doesn't.
Date: Apr 26, 2017 11:25 pm Title: Chapter 5
I really LOVE the chemistry between Brian and Justin here! It's playful and sexy. Definitely more-than-a-summer-fling worthy! That kiss what HOT! I'm with Riley... just do the 'grown-up' and put each other out of their initial misery... or more accurately put me out of MY misery, LOL
As for Lindsay... Jeez, I wish she would get all of her facts before she decides to go on her high moral crusade. Without knowing anything, she just takes Michael's word for what happened between him and Brian. It's infuriating that she can't see through the lies and bullshit. I hope Mel gives her that dose of truth and reality even before they leave Sandcove.
I'm glad that Em went to confide in Vic, even if I'm not happy with Vic's initial reaction of trying to explain away Michael's actions. I know that's the normal response mechanism for ALL things Twerp but still it grates on my nerves. I doubt Deb's reaction will be much better since it is all kinds of evident that Michael is in the wrong. I'm afraid that instead of blaming Michael, which should happen, she'll throw the book at Brian, calling him a bad influence on her perfect devil. I hope I'm proven wrong but so far I can't see it happening any other way. Well at least it is all out in the open and no one can say they weren't told about Michael's misdeeds.
Looking forward to the next chapter, Star!!
Happy Writing and HUGS,
~Nichelle
Date: Apr 26, 2017 11:05 am Title: Chapter 4
Thank you fic gods! Brian knows the truth mostly, but I'm thinking there's a lot more he will uncover. Luckily, he's got Justin and his crew to distract him.
Bens situation is curious. He was to balking about Mikey, right? But his if he's never been to the Pitts?
Very nice using Time Bender as a analogy for Brian and Justin. We are only learning more of the facts, but I'm sure Time Benders villain/love has been revealed..
Date: Apr 26, 2017 10:59 am Title: Chapter 3
I hope you know what day is cuz I gotta give it to you for Granny. Hysterical!!! It's Jen with a bad mouth, lol. Her intelligence gathering was epic. I can't wait to see what she's up to. Brian is about to be hit by a whirlwind!
dap- slang word meaning positive affirmation or credit
[Report This]Date: Apr 25, 2017 9:13 pm Title: Chapter 4
Well, Mel finally told him about the GHB. But those filled condems have not only Brian worried but me too. Love the cooking Justin. However I see myself gaining weight just reading this.
Date: Apr 25, 2017 8:15 pm Title: Chapter 4
The dialogues are epic in this story!
I picked one, but it's not the only one I loved “Justin’s just working on his mating dance before checking out the goods.”
It's vaudeville-like, with people coming and going in others' houses. I guess it's the way really small towns work when everybody knows the neighbors, in a good way.
Happy and sad at the same time that Mel told Brian; at least, he knows.
Date: Apr 25, 2017 8:13 pm Title: Chapter 4
Gran is hilarious!! I absolutely adore her! Justin is definitely making a great impression on everyone he comes in contact with. It was great to have a little backstory on why he gave up his lucrative career. I think he might go back to it, at least moderately, now that he has a face to put to the 'soulmate' character.
If the adage "The best way to a man's heart is through his stomach" is true, Justin is about to win a whole lot of hearts, especially Brian's! Cook On, Cutie!! LOL
As for Mel, I'm so happy that Brian trusts her enough that he knows she wouldn't harm him. I appreciated the sensitivity in which she delivered the news of Michael's betrayal. Now only if Lindsay will freaking fall in line...Michael's days within that group are numbered! Is it wrong for me to be happy as a pig in slop about that?
Although there isn't any bonafide proof, it's definitely easy to see him slipping a drug into Brian's drink to get what he's always wanted or to make everyone think he has. What better way to keep the tricks away from Brian than to have them all believing he's off the market with his best friend? I mean, nothing else was working for him- not the whining, the pleas, the tantrums, the suggestions- NOTHING! It isn't hard to stretch the imagination to how desperate Michael could and would get. I hope he doesn't follow Ted and Emmett to Sandcove!
Happy Writing and HUGS,
~Nichelle
Date: Apr 25, 2017 7:59 pm Title: Chapter 4
I think I'm seeing a parallel between the ending of time Bender as Justin is describing it and the end of QAF. Leaving it open to a possible continuation or leaving it in such a way that the view/or reader in this instance, can make their own ending. nice touch.
Glad Brian believed Mel. That he's going to be done with Michael. Looking forward to Michael's reaction and everything he's going to try to do. I hope he mistakenly admits to it. Brian is a hell of a wordsdman perhaps he can figure out a way. Someone is going to have to in order to get proof.
riley is makign friends with Brian. That's a good thing. hopefull he'll be able to lighten brian up a bit. Open the doors for justin.
Terrific chapter. I was looking forward to this.
Cheers,
Elaine
Date: Apr 25, 2017 6:27 pm Title: Chapter 3
I thought Gran was dead as the house next to Justin's is rented.
Fortunately, she's not; what a loss it would have been! What a character!!!
I love the "growly" nickname.
The description of Gran from Brian is wonderful.
The talk between Mel and Emmett is very interesting as Mel let Emmett know that she and Brian respect each other, and that she will take his best interests to heart.
Date: Apr 25, 2017 3:41 pm Title: Chapter 3
Oh FFS!!!!!! Once again, I'm trying to post a review, and once again, we go offline. shitballs! I hate trying to remember what I was going to post the first time. GRRR. F-ing internet.
Aaaaaanyway....I love gran! I say again and with emphasis... I LOVE GRAN! she is a hoot and I can't wait to see what all she brings to the story. I get the impression she's going to play a fairly important role in getting our boys together and keeping them together! I had a quick flash of Michael mouthing off to Gran. hehehe...oh man...Have to say, that would be epic, and incredibly humourous!
speaking of Michael...I really hope that Mel talks to Brian soon. that he finds out the truth and there is a showdown with Michael. something like that can't be pushed aside! curious as to what the outcome will be of that. Will Lindsey belive it? will she support Mel in keeping Michael away from gus? I certainly hope so!! What about Deb? So many questions!! :)
Who do you have in mind for Riley? I know you have something up your sleeve.
Cheers
Elaine
Date: Apr 25, 2017 6:14 am Title: Chapter 3
Ok gran is something else, wow. Someone needs to tell Brian soon.