Date: Jul 03, 2016 12:55 pm Title: Chapter 12
At least Deb's apology was sincere. Poor Justin, lost his desert. The Justin, Nick, Ted triangle is cool and funny. It's just like Mikey to want to tattle even when he doesn't know the truth. Now that Nick is interested in Ted what do you have in mind for Ben?
Date: Jul 03, 2016 4:43 am Title: Chapter 12
This is soooo addictive lol. Keep up the good work.
Author's Response:
That is all I want. I hope to keep everyone entertained.
Date: Jul 03, 2016 4:36 am Title: Chapter 12
Pretty okay apology from Deb she acted just the way I expected so I will let it pass, Justin might just gain a pound the way he keeps eating, the mouse scene made me smile and giggle a little, good to see Ted is going to get some lovin lol I am so happy for him. I think you should have Michael dance to the same song Justin danced to and even try for the same outfit, in his mind he should hear a lot of cheering, you could even get him to do the cabbage patch😄😄😄😄.Get him to try to do the same moves that Justin did, I was also thinking why not have Michael dye his hair blonde too?
Author's Response:
I really love Deb, but Brian still has his doubts. The food theme is something I picked up from other stories. That is what i first thought of for the dance still work in progress on that one. I actually looked up the cabbage patch, Interesting. I like the blonde hair but i think he might have and accident if i go with it. Thanks for the review and the suggestions.
Date: Jul 03, 2016 12:30 am Title: Chapter 11
Michael going quiet and yet still being delusional is even more scary he is going to really humiliate himself during this contest and that makes me smile, but the aftermath could be devastating to everyone else when he doesn't get Brian, I can't wait to see Deb actually apologize for what she did to Justin and Brian, it is about time that she finally woke up and saw Michael for who he really is. I really hope everyone will be there when Michael dances in the contest this will just make Emmett's year lol
Author's Response:
I am working on Deb, probably cause i love Deb and want her to come out of this with out to much harm. I have been procrastinating on Michael's dance because when it happens i want it to be really bad. Everything i have written about it in my notes isn't bad enough yet. Trust me i will have everyone there.
Date: Jul 02, 2016 9:07 pm Title: Chapter 11
::I hear a whimper, now he feels my pain.::
Oh, this is priceless! I'm loving this little romp! And finally Deb gets a clue! LOL
Author's Response:
Thaks for reading. This is a result of me not having anything to read. My family are helping when i get stuck can you tell none of us can be serious.
Date: Jul 02, 2016 8:15 pm Title: Chapter 11
Oh the chuckles I got from this chapter. So much good stuff. I was hoping to hear about Deb's visit, it sounds like it's going to be good. Brian's right about one thing. Mikey really needs outside help.
Author's Response:
Brian is going to stay skeptical. I am trying to keep some humor going because some of this is kinda of sad. I need happy to feed me and keep going. Thanks for the Review.
Date: Jul 02, 2016 1:42 pm Title: Chapter 10
Oh, I like Lo. Mikey trying to steal tricks - that's funny! Love the Ted, Emmett and Daphne moments. Deb caused her own problems, Justin told her the truth and she couldn't take it.
Date: Jul 02, 2016 12:55 pm Title: Chapter 10
I LOVE Lo! It's a damn shame that Brian and Justin can't even have a night out without Michael acting a fool! And dancing around, hip-checking Justin and talking about stealing Justin's tricks as if it were even possible...smh Michael needs a tranquilizer dart to the ass- just knock him out until he gains some damn sense! And Debbie still wants people to help him? You really can't fix ignorant. I hope Ted, Em and Daphne work out exactly what Michael is doing before Justin is forced to defend himself... or Brian is!
Looking forwatd to MORE! Happy Writing and HUGS!
~Nichelle
Author's Response:
Lo is my sister who was hanging out with me and saw me writing this. I have never written anything before so she was curious. Then she asked to be a serial killer or a cat lady named Loco Lo but i want her to be a badass. Now as for Michael, tell me you wouldn't do the same if not worse. It just isn't any fun any other way.
Date: Jul 02, 2016 3:35 am Title: Chapter 10
Lo I Think I Love You!!! lol I think everyone should take cover because Michael is getting to blow, Brian is right to be worried about Justin I think if Michael gets the chance he will attack Justin, I like the fact that Ted, Emmett and Daphne are hanging out, I see Deb is still buying into Michael's delusions I feel so bad for Ben and Hunter they didn't ask to be in this situation, I also feel bad for Carl too because when Michael blows there is going to be a lot of casualties.
Author's Response:
My sister wanted to be in the story but i don't have any room for a serial killer or a cat lady so this is what she got. I am going to go through a couple days of Micheal's stalking because the King of Babylon is going to be a mess.
Date: Jul 01, 2016 3:11 pm Title: Chapter 9
Darn! Just when you get to the good part, you stop! Mikey being nice? He's up to something. Bet Brian has a clue thanks to Daphne. Can't wait to see what you have planned for your next chapter.
Author's Response:
Everyone at this point is just going to hold there breath through everything.
Date: Jul 01, 2016 2:11 pm Title: Chapter 9
LOL! Let the foolery BEGINNNN <in my sinister, horrible announcer voice>!!! I'm not putting anything passed Michael and I don't think Ted is either, even if Brian is on the fence. Justin had me laughing aloud!
Looking forward to more! Happy Writing and HUGS,
~Nichelle
Date: Jul 01, 2016 7:13 am Title: Chapter 9
Justin don't relax too much....
Date: Jul 01, 2016 5:52 am Title: Chapter 2
YYou mad ed Ted funny as g ell loved it
Date: Jul 01, 2016 4:26 am Title: Chapter 9
Nope Don't Trust this quiet lull makes me nervous! I know Justin wants to trust that Michael is okay but you should know better than to trust a sleeping snake, they always strike when you least expect it, don't just go from being crazy to calm in thirty seconds, if the boys are going to the King of Babylon Contest then this is going to be Good 😄
Date: Jul 01, 2016 1:34 am Title: Chapter 8
This is so addictive! Love it!
I going to sit here with my popcorn (maybe invite Emmett to join me) and watch Michael implode.
Sandy
Date: Jul 01, 2016 12:55 am Title: Chapter 8
Love how Deb gets her comeupance. That Jen knew she was there the whole time. That Brian knew to call in Daphne for support. That Ted knew to call in Em to stop Daphne from murdering Michael. Shame that. What's Michael up to now?
Date: Jul 01, 2016 12:24 am Title: Chapter 8
Uh oh! It is the calm before Hurricane Michael strikes I don't think anyone is going to like this, Deb is insane if she thinks Brian and Justin should help Michael, I figured Jennifer knew Deb was in the bathroom (Man Deb is just as selfish and crazy as her son!!). What is Daphne going to do to Michael? Paris for Brian and Justin, they should have left days ago. What is Ben going to do with Michael he seriously needs to stop being a door mat, he needs to think about him and Hunter.
Date: Jun 30, 2016 4:43 pm Title: Chapter 7
Wow Mikey really is delusional here. WTF is he thinking? The rest of the gang are slowly opening their eyes to the whole situation....maybe things will quiet down for awhile.
Author's Response:
Sure it's gonna quiet down. I mean no one could keep up this pace. Thanks for the reveiw.
Date: Jun 30, 2016 3:06 pm Title: Chapter 1
Brilliant! ! Short review. Sorry. Moving day. Losing Internet.
Love this story!!
Kinda looking forward to Michael making an ass of himself. His level of delusion is hysterical. So enjoying this! Looking forward to more.
Date: Jun 30, 2016 1:06 am Title: Chapter 7
WOWWWWW!!! Jennifer is such a Bad-A$$! Deb should really listen to Brian and stay away from him and Justin or she will seriously suffer, I liked Justin's attempt at distracting Daphne but I do wonder what she is going to do? Ted just can't catch a break right now lol Michael is so far gone I don't think anyone can bring him back and I feel bad for Ben and Hunter because they didn't ask for this crazy situation, is it wrong that I want Michael to embarrass himself at the King of Babylon contest before they put him in the straight jacket?? Nice to see Lindsay and Melanie trying to grow up instead of playing at it, I always hated when she called Brian names in front of Gus nice to see her being called out about it. Can't wait to read what happens Next!!😀
Author's Response:
Thanks I am working on it this part is going require a little more strategy. I want Michael to work at getting back in everyones good graces so they don't see what is comming next. Thank you for review.
Date: Jun 30, 2016 12:12 am Title: Chapter 7
Okay so now we have Lindsay seeing the error of her ways but for how long though? Entitled much? Mel really can't be blamed for neglect regarding Lindsay's issue with her jealousy. That's a personal decision but I wonder if Mel will get that memo... As far as her conversation with Gus, I'm glad that she did a little thinking of her own regarding how she refers to that child's father. Whether she likes it or not, Gus IS Brian's son and whereas it's okay for her to have her own opinion about him, that should never be poured vehemently into a child's psyche. Hopefully now that Mel has seen the problem reflected back at her through Gus' eyes, she will stick to her guns and address it within herself. I always thought that Mel's feelings about Brian were a direct result of Lindsay's fawning. Maybe Mel will get that revelation too.
Gotta LOVE Daphne!!! Now THAT is a best friend! And unlike Debbie and Jen, she isn't looking to place blame but to address the 'problem' at the root cause (although I don't blame Jennifer one damn bit!). I LOVE the fact that she is looking for Michael. Oh PLEASE let her get ahold of him before this is all over. I would so love to see her handle Michael before he is possibly carted off to the Looney Bin. BTW... I LOVE Brian and Justin's dynamic here and the fact that Justin pulled Brian's pants down in front of everyone. It was a completely unexpected moment of levity in what was a tense situation.
Meanwhile Deb just can't stop trying to re-enforce her views on all parties that are NOT her son. Why would she even think of calling Justin as if he could make Brian do anything that he really didn't want to do, like talk to her? I feel bad for Carl having to deal with two delusional and emotionally insane Novotnys. I think he needed to have left her in jail until they found the weasal.
Tuck is funny but I totally get his POV. No one would have known or thought that Jennifer Taylor could be a little Hellcat when pushed. It would stand to reason that now that he's seen this side of her, his view of her is irrevocably changed. But I think it will be for the better.
Personally I hope that Ben decides to leave Michael out on the limb by himself. How much is the man supposed to put up with? He has his own health and sanity to worry about. And although I feel for Hunter regarding the broken home, he has yet to learn that sometimes it's better to detach with love from that which causes more harm than good. They'll always care about Michael but it obvious that the man doesn't want to be a family with them. But maybe they will get it but maybe they won't.
As for Dum-Dum-Dum-Dum-Dumbass! As if he could really compete on ANY level with Justin. Justin is smarter, more charming and charismatic than Michael which are things that KEPT Brian. I think that's the thing that very few people understood about Brian and Justin's relationship. Sex was a part of it and it may have reeled Brian in (and vice versa) but it didn't keep him with Justin. Nor did it keep Justin from moving on, even if it was only temporary. If any good comes out of this, perhaps that will be the ONE thing that Michael and everyone else eventually sees. I think Ted, Em, Daphne and Jennifer knows but the rest need an eye-opening experience too.
HUGS,
~Nichelle
Author's Response:
No one is safe does that help. I was reading a reader response at another site to anti Michael and that she feels that everyone picks on Michael and while I feel for her I just can't save him. Thank you for enjoying this.
Date: Jun 29, 2016 11:39 pm Title: Chapter 6
Lindsay, Lindsay, LINDSAY!!! Lawd, what will it take for her to realize that Brian's world does NOT revolve around HER?! Between her and Debbie, I don't know which one likes to live in their delusions more!! And Deb.... I find it funny that she really believes that she knows Michael at all. As a parent, I can honestly say that I know my children but I would NEVER attempt to say what they will or better yet will NOT do when out of my presence. "My baby wouldn't do that!" That's bullshit especially since you have about 6 people telling you the exact SAME thing about the little pain in the ass! But again, Deb likes to live in her dreams. Oedipus Complex much? Hopefully Carl will wake her up before she needs anti-anxiety meds because of her free-falling fart of an offspring! SMH and then to think that Brian didn't mean what he said to her....Really Lady??!! For someone who would swear up and down that she knew Brian Kinney inside and out, she couldn't have been more wrong than to think that it was just his anger talking.
Girl you got me HOOKED!! Glad to see there is another chapter waiting for me. Keep my fix coming!! <singing> They trying to make me go to (fan-fic) rehab I said NO NO NO!! LOL
Happy Writing and HUGS,
~Nichelle
Date: Jun 29, 2016 10:53 pm Title: Chapter 7
Now, now, Michael, if you think copying Justin is going to help you, you are in for a big surprise. Justin is younger, has a better ass and dances better then you do. Glad to see that Lindsay realizes she's acting like Mikey and plans not to. Nice to see what everyone else thought about what happened. Poor Tuck.
Author's Response:
I always felt that we didn't see enough of Tucker and Jen. I think Tucker is going to enjoy seeing her less straight laced. Hey who said Michael can't do Justin. Okay your right but doesn't mean we can't enjoy it.
Date: Jun 29, 2016 9:08 pm Title: Chapter 6
Oh boy a new chapter. Glad I didn't miss it. Poor Em having to watch the kids, I'm glad to see that Brian had the locks changed and that Ted will be the only one with a key. Lindsay will be pissed. You have to feel sorry for Ben, but how stupid can he be that he still wants to talk with Michael? Now Deb, I'm not sure just how much she believes everybody. She might just want to get out of jail. I was rooting for Jen in the fight, which taking place in the diner was bound to be filmed. lol. Next chapter please!
Author's Response:
I wrote chapter 6 and 7 together and now that they have been edited i gave it to you.
Date: Jun 29, 2016 4:50 pm Title: Chapter 5
Excellent visual! I imaginied all in my mind as I read it. Absolutely hilarious! Jenn ROCKS!!!!!!! Talk about Mama bear!
Glad Brian kept Deb where she is adn said what he did. Not sure if what he said will hit home with her. Not sure if she'll ever take the blinders off with regards to her "perfect son" But when EVERYONE is telling you he's nuts....you'd think at some point she'd listen. Maybe Vic will give her something to think about. (is he alive in this?? I can't remember if you've mentioned him or not. Sorry)
Completely addictedx to this fic of yours and anticipate every update. Can't wait for the next one.
Nutball Lindsey is up next I gather. this should be interesting. Pretty sure Mel isn't going to put up with much.
Author's Response:
I am taking it a little easy on Lindsey for now. But i think that she is going to try to reform but can't. Deb really does see that Michael is out of control but she isn't going to stop trying to see her son in a good light. Thank you for letting me know you enjoy this.