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Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 22, 2018 2:33 pm Title: Chapter 6

Lots of laughter and funny moments in this chapter… “My koala bear, or do you prefer kangaroo?” – the sneaking of the cookies – the problems with tying the shoelaces and the center of gravity – the multicolored lights shining up your ass…. And so on

I loved the moment when Brian tells Michael that he loves Justin and that he is finally able to admit his feelings. Thanks!!!

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 22, 2018 3:53 am Title: Chapter 5

“Wanna be Stepford husbands?” – what a great proposal. :-) But after this cute intro to the topic you let the real proposal follow and Ita, there couldn’t be a better way to ask Justin. Love it!

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 21, 2018 6:33 pm Title: Chapter 4

Again, amazing, Brian’s appointment at the hospital, Brian’s sarcasm and repeating “no” to everything and a totally excited Justin. And then, what a beautiful moment at Britin, when Brian surprises Justin with this picnic (it was such a hurtful and humiliating scene in S2 when Brian refused to do this picnic with Justin at the loft) and telling Justin, despite his insecurities, that he loves him. I know it’s mpeg and fiction but I would have loved to see your development of their story on TV. Warmest regards!

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 21, 2018 3:50 pm Title: Chapter 3

With this chapter and the events at the diner, you finally got me addicted… “You knocked up Sunshine” - “It’s not Justin, it’s me.” They whole scene at the diner is priceless, inredible and also so beautiful: “In that moment I was hit hard and fast with a resolution. I loved him. I really loved him, probably more than he loved me” – And then the cruel reality, a pound a week… haha… Great!!!

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 21, 2018 3:42 pm Title: Chapter 2

I love Brian’s thoughts and how the “intruder” turns into “peanut” – so cute! And again, so funny: “I have something to tell you…But I need to barf first” And Justin’s fainting over the news… J Again, very well written. Thanks!

Reviewer: aglaja5 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 21, 2018 3:37 pm Title: Chapter 1

OMG – I’m so in love with your amazing story! I’ve just finished it and think I’ll re-read it, also to give you the well-deserved reviews. This is one of the most beautiful mpeg-stories I’ve read so far. There are soooo many cute, beautiful, hot and especially funny moments. Thanks for sharing this wonderful story! So, Chapter One: Interesting beginning, very well written and I totally fell in love with your Brian, his behavior and reaction to his pregnancy (“must kill Sunshine” - :-) ) , the whole way you characterized him. Great! Warmest regards, a.

Reviewer: bellawu Signed [Report This]
Date: Jan 05, 2018 1:01 am Title: Chapter 3

Brian going to be a mom... lol he will kill me if he read this

Reviewer: bellawu Signed [Report This]
Date: Jan 05, 2018 12:26 am Title: Chapter 1

There is always the first time for everything. In my case, reading mpreg story. If i can survive reading about sparkly vampire, i can survive this. Lol.... so far i love the first ch. 

Reviewer: susi_in_love Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 31, 2016 9:16 pm Title: Chapter 43

Absolutely love the view of their everyday lives. 



Author's Response:

Thank you for your words. I'm glad you're enjoying the story.

Please keep letting me know what you think of it. I love reading what the reader's thoughts are on my work. :)

Reviewer: susi_in_love Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 31, 2016 8:45 pm Title: Chapter 42

Now that cake I would love to taste. 

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Date: Oct 31, 2016 8:05 pm Title: Chapter 40

Awww, poor Patrick. He must hurt so bad. 

Reviewer: susi_in_love Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 31, 2016 6:51 pm Title: Chapter 39

Brian with chicken pox. That will be hilarious. 

Reviewer: susi_in_love Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 31, 2016 6:33 pm Title: Chapter 37

Patrick is sooo funny. I can't stop smiling.

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Date: Oct 31, 2016 6:04 pm Title: Chapter 35

She is home. That's so great. 

Reviewer: susi_in_love Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 31, 2016 5:47 pm Title: Chapter 33

You were right about the tissues. I hope she is going to be okay. 

Reviewer: susi_in_love Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 31, 2016 5:36 pm Title: Chapter 32

Oh no. That is way too soon. I really thought Brian would have learned his lesson after the last time.

Reviewer: susi_in_love Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 31, 2016 5:05 pm Title: Chapter 29

I love Brian on a mission. 

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Date: Oct 31, 2016 1:15 pm Title: Chapter 26

I can understand why Justin is afraid. I hope everything will be alright. 

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Date: Oct 31, 2016 1:05 pm Title: Chapter 25

Oh wow. I have to know how it continues. I'm off reading. Great story. 

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Date: Oct 31, 2016 12:19 pm Title: Chapter 24

I love that you made Patrick resembling both Brian and Justin. It's really cute. 

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Date: Oct 31, 2016 10:29 am Title: Chapter 22

Munchkin likes Violin music. Too funny. 

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Date: Oct 31, 2016 9:49 am Title: Chapter 20

Yay, the baby is born and everyone is okay. Now I can't wait to see how they handle life with a newborn baby. 

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Date: Oct 31, 2016 9:43 am Title: Chapter 19

Now you made me cry. 

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Date: Oct 31, 2016 9:38 am Title: Chapter 18

Poor Justin. The thought of losing Brian must be devastating. 

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Date: Oct 31, 2016 9:22 am Title: Chapter 15

Nobody messes with the psychotic pregnant guy. Love that sentence. 

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